What do you think of the first couple paragraphs of my story?

If we do find the remnants of an ancient civilization on Mars when we start going there, those in power would probably try to cover it up. Why? Maybe to avoid religious mayhem, maybe to keep something they’ve found from the people, only to use it to their own greedy advantage. Makes you wonder all these high society secret groups that are so talked about yet so quick to be laughed off by the media and politicians in power. Almost as if what you are asking is a joke, when in reality, these groups really do exist and are the major power players of the planning of world events such as catastrophes. Different countries of the world have started discovering the ability to control weather. China is the first. They have recently been reported to make rain which their country has been studying for centuries. In 10 to 20 years, they might possibly have the ability to create hurricanes, or what if that feat has been accomplished already, due to the fact that America has had some heavy hurricane seasons the past couple years.
Let’s not forget the greatest amount of death in your lifetime, witnessed as the Tsunami that killed over 200,000 in a matter of minutes. Am I claiming that China is secretly and invisibly attacking the United States and other countries? No…and if they really are, even though I would be just guessing, then their will be another great harvest of souls into the heavens.

well i would like you yo continue with the book believe me u can be better than dan brown and its damn good as people of this world have nothing to think about and just waste their life so books like your will atleast make the people think about something and use their hyper fast computers (brain) a little bit and in case you liked this answer and selected this as the best answer then please do write the books title with it . i will be the first person to purchase it

9 Responses to “What do you think of the first couple paragraphs of my story?”

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    Ken Says:

    Wow . write a book. Not a book I mean write a book. Still don’t see the question mark. When I do you already answered yourself. So what’s the question?
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    PFDisHistory! Says:

    well it must be good seeing as i read the whole thing. i usually get bored… er, sounds more like a essay to me but i dont usually read this genre
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    Tan B Says:

    It’s good.I like it.Conspiracy theories are great.
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    viju Says:

    gud
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    devilmonster3002 Says:

    It’s not me that will suffer!
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    pyro Says:

    dude

    sounds cool. dont kno where ur headed with it but great potential man, good luck!
    dont like the part bout creating hurricanes for the reasons u implied tho. just my two cents

    cheers
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    help me Says:

    well i would like you yo continue with the book believe me u can be better than dan brown and its damn good as people of this world have nothing to think about and just waste their life so books like your will atleast make the people think about something and use their hyper fast computers (brain) a little bit and in case you liked this answer and selected this as the best answer then please do write the books title with it . i will be the first person to purchase it
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    lauracbd Says:

    It sounds very good, I will like to read more of it. Let us know when you publish it.
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    ladydragonknight2000 Says:

    It’s better then your intro. easier to understand. Keep up the good work!
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